So who wants first crack at my chapter? And this isn't just reading for fun, this is reading for critique. Specifically, what I'm looking for is:
Do I have enough details? I've been having trouble writing concrete images but I also have trouble realizing that I have missed said details.
Does this chapter have a beginning, middle, and end? Does it tell a story in a way that makes you want to know the overall story?
What is missing? I've been getting a lot of feed back from my cohorts that details are missing that make them feel cheated. Help me out with that?
Anybody want to take a stab at this? I need to work on the second chapter while this one cools, but I want to know what to do with it when I get back to it. Leave me a note and I'll email you what I have.